我写了一篇英语作文，帮我修改一下好吗?，非常感谢My，View，on，Friends，Real，friends，share，th...
我写了一篇英语作文，帮我修改一下好吗? 非常感谢
My View on Friends Real friends share the same ideals and interests. My friends are very kind. We help each other and advance together. If I make a mistake, my friend will not hesitate to point it out for me. We often play basketball outside. My friend is good at English, but I am poor in it. When I had difficulties, my friend can help me. So my English had improved a lot. I think keep friendship is very necessary. I like my friends.修改如下:(删去括号内的内容即是修改好的全文)
Real
friends
share
(the
same
删掉，既然share,说明不一样，分享)ideals
and
interests.
My
friends
are
very
kind.
We
help
each
other
and
make
progress
(advance
删掉，不好)together.
If
I
make
a
mistake,
they
(my
friend
重复)
will
not
hesitate
to
point
it
out
for
me.
We
often
play
basketball
together(outside
不必点明室外，没有意义).
One
of
my
friends
(前面friends是复数，这里应点明是一个朋友)is
good
at
English,
but
I
am
poor
at
(固定搭配，不用in)it.
With
her
help,
(When
I
had
difficulties,
my
friend
can
help
me.
So
罗嗦，删去)my
English
has
(had
不要，不用过去完成时)improved
a
lot.
I
think
maintaining
(keep
不好，而且作主语要用ing形式)friendship
is
very
necessary.
I
like
my
friends.
Real
friends
share
(the
same
删掉，既然share,说明不一样，分享)ideals
and
interests.
My
friends
are
very
kind.
We
help
each
other
and
make
progress
(advance
删掉，不好)together.
If
I
make
a
mistake,
they
(my
friend
重复)
will
not
hesitate
to
point
it
out
for
me.
We
often
play
basketball
together(outside
不必点明室外，没有意义).
One
of
my
friends
(前面friends是复数，这里应点明是一个朋友)is
good
at
English,
but
I
am
poor
at
(固定搭配，不用in)it.
With
her
help,
(When
I
had
difficulties,
my
friend
can
help
me.
So
罗嗦，删去)my
English
has
(had
不要，不用过去完成时)improved
a
lot.
I
think
maintaining
(keep
不好，而且作主语要用ing形式)friendship
is
very
necessary.
I
like
my
friends.
我写了一篇英语作文，帮我修改一下好吗？ 非常感谢你！
My Grandpax27s Hobbyrn My grandpa lives alone, but he doesnx27t think lonely. Because he has many hobbies. Such us playing basketball, watering the flowers, listening the music and so on. In the early morning, he usually plays basketball in the club in order to keep fit. At night, he opens the computer to watch news and chatting with his friends. I think his hobbies are very useful and exciting. Ix27ll support you forever.你写的不只一个兴趣,所以标题是My Grandpa's Hobbies
but he doesn't think lonely.=but he doesn't feel lonely.
think=想,feel=觉得/感到
Such us=Such as
Such as=例如
watering the flowers=watering plants
the flowers是指定的花 ,我想你的意思是园艺吧,所以watering plants是比较好的
listening the music=listening to music
opens the computer to watch news=switch on the computer for watching news
I'll support you forever=I'll support him forever.
but he doesn't think lonely.=but he doesn't feel lonely.
think=想,feel=觉得/感到
Such us=Such as
Such as=例如
watering the flowers=watering plants
the flowers是指定的花 ,我想你的意思是园艺吧,所以watering plants是比较好的
listening the music=listening to music
opens the computer to watch news=switch on the computer for watching news
I'll support you forever=I'll support him forever.
二排的us应该改成we
listening the music 改为listening to the music
listening the music 改为listening to the music
我写的一篇英语作文， 给我修改一下好吗？ 非常感谢你！
My favourite seasonrn Other peoplex27s favourite seasons are different from mine. I like summer best. Someone thinks summer is too hot. But I think itx27s so happy for me that during this season. On other words, I enjoy myself in summer. I can eat ic-cream and swim in the cool sea. I also can have my longer holiday. I can play all day without having class. The watermelons are very sweet, too. So I love summer.去掉第一句。But I think一句有问题，建议改为But I think it's so happy to enjoy myself in summer.后一句自然去掉。I also 一句改为：I also can enjoy my long summer vacation.这样更地道一些。后面几句写得很精彩，无需改动。解释一下去掉第一句的原因：在英语思维里，这一句纯属多余，很不严密，因为喜欢夏天的人大有人在，这样说会让人感到莫名其妙，并且表达方式也是中国式英语，不好。
my favourite season is summer through it's different from others .
in other words 换句话说 不是 on 其他还可以
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