我写的一篇英语作文，帮忙改下语法谢谢Helloeveryclassmate----helloeverybody比较常用听起来比较...
我写的一篇英语作文，帮忙改下语法谢谢
Hello
every
classmate
----hello
everybody
比较常用
听起来比较舒服
about
learn
English
.
-------about
learning
English
介词后接动名词
或名词
by
watch
English
movies
-------by
watching
。。。同上
Listen
English
music
--------听什么
一般
用
listen
to
They
can't
laugh
at
you
------they
won't
laugh
at
you
"他们不会嘲笑你"
不会太生硬
every
classmate
----hello
everybody
比较常用
听起来比较舒服
about
learn
English
.
-------about
learning
English
介词后接动名词
或名词
by
watch
English
movies
-------by
watching
。。。同上
Listen
English
music
--------听什么
一般
用
listen
to
They
can't
laugh
at
you
------they
won't
laugh
at
you
"他们不会嘲笑你"
不会太生硬
Hello
every
classmate
(改为
Hello,
boys
and
girls
或
Hello,
everyone
更为地道).It's
my
pleasure
to
have
the
chance
to
stand
here
to
talk
about
learn
ing
English
.
Many
of
us
want
to
know
how
to
learn
English
well
.
Here
are
my
ideas(改为
suggestions更为恰当)
.
First
,
I
think
we
should
listen
and
read
English
more
often
.
We
can
listen
and
read
English
by
watching
English
movies
and
reading
English
books
.Listening
English
music
can
also
help
you
.
Second
,we
have
to
use
English.
We
can
speak
with
our
English
teachers
or
classmates
.
Don't
be
shy
.They
can't(应该为won't)
laugh
at
you
.
Finally
,
when
we
forget
English
words
,we
can
(find)look
up
them
in
the
English
dictianary(dictionary
拼写有误）
.
English
is
an
important
foreign
language.
It's
very
useful
for
us
in
the
future
.
So
we
have
to
learn
English
well
.
Thank
you.
every
classmate
(改为
Hello,
boys
and
girls
或
Hello,
everyone
更为地道).It's
my
pleasure
to
have
the
chance
to
stand
here
to
talk
about
learn
ing
English
.
Many
of
us
want
to
know
how
to
learn
English
well
.
Here
are
my
ideas(改为
suggestions更为恰当)
.
First
,
I
think
we
should
listen
and
read
English
more
often
.
We
can
listen
and
read
English
by
watching
English
movies
and
reading
English
books
.Listening
English
music
can
also
help
you
.
Second
,we
have
to
use
English.
We
can
speak
with
our
English
teachers
or
classmates
.
Don't
be
shy
.They
can't(应该为won't)
laugh
at
you
.
Finally
,
when
we
forget
English
words
,we
can
(find)look
up
them
in
the
English
dictianary(dictionary
拼写有误）
.
English
is
an
important
foreign
language.
It's
very
useful
for
us
in
the
future
.
So
we
have
to
learn
English
well
.
Thank
you.
Hello
everyone
.It's
my
honour
to
stand
here
for
communicating.
Today
I
want
to
say
something
about
learning
English
.
Many
of
us
want
to
know
how
to
learn
English
well
.
Here
are
my
ideas
.
First
,
I
think
we
should
listen
to
and
read
English
more
often
.
We
can
listen
and
read
English
by
watch
English
movies
and
read
English
book
.Listening
to
English
music
can
also
help
you
.
Second
,we
have
to
use
English.
We
can
talk
with
our
English
teachers
or
classmates
.
Don't
be
shy
.They
won't
laugh
at
you
.
Finally
,
when
we
forget
English
words
,we
can
find
them
in
an
English
dictianary
.
直接在文章中该了，语法错误不多，有些用法有点别扭。。。希望能帮到你。。。
English
is
an
important
foreign
language.
It's
very
useful
for
us
in
the
future
.
So
we
have
to
learn
English
well
.
Thank
you.
everyone
.It's
my
honour
to
stand
here
for
communicating.
Today
I
want
to
say
something
about
learning
English
.
Many
of
us
want
to
know
how
to
learn
English
well
.
Here
are
my
ideas
.
First
,
I
think
we
should
listen
to
and
read
English
more
often
.
We
can
listen
and
read
English
by
watch
English
movies
and
read
English
book
.Listening
to
English
music
can
also
help
you
.
Second
,we
have
to
use
English.
We
can
talk
with
our
English
teachers
or
classmates
.
Don't
be
shy
.They
won't
laugh
at
you
.
Finally
,
when
we
forget
English
words
,we
can
find
them
in
an
English
dictianary
.
直接在文章中该了，语法错误不多，有些用法有点别扭。。。希望能帮到你。。。
English
is
an
important
foreign
language.
It's
very
useful
for
us
in
the
future
.
So
we
have
to
learn
English
well
.
Thank
you.
for
communicating我觉得改为to
communicate
好
Today
I
want
to
say
something
about
learn
English
错了
介词后面用v-ing形式
by
watch
English
movies
and
read
English
book
错了
介词后面用v-ing形式
.Listen
English
music要用非谓语listening
They
can't
laugh
at
you
改成they
won't
laugh
at
you
好吧？
we
can
find
them
in
English
dictianary
find
改成look
up
吧
communicating我觉得改为to
communicate
好
Today
I
want
to
say
something
about
learn
English
错了
介词后面用v-ing形式
by
watch
English
movies
and
read
English
book
错了
介词后面用v-ing形式
.Listen
English
music要用非谓语listening
They
can't
laugh
at
you
改成they
won't
laugh
at
you
好吧？
we
can
find
them
in
English
dictianary
find
改成look
up
吧
第1行.communicate
with
(sb.)you.
2
about
learning
从first开始可以提行写
作2段
3
more
often
没有错误
但可以换成
as
possible
as
we
can
4
by
watching
`
5
and
reading
后面
listening
english
作主语
要用动名词
6
couldn't
比can't
委婉
with
(sb.)you.
2
about
learning
从first开始可以提行写
作2段
3
more
often
没有错误
但可以换成
as
possible
as
we
can
4
by
watching
`
5
and
reading
后面
listening
english
作主语
要用动名词
6
couldn't
比can't
委婉
帮帮忙，修改下面的英语作文，语法哪里错了，麻烦帮我改一下，谢谢。
Welcome to the Yunnan University of Nationalities Yuhua Campus.I was the Art Istitute of Visual Communication Design 3 class Ann.Ix27m 19 years old.Ix27m from Yunna of HongHe.I like playing volleyball and play computer games.I was our class league brach secretary.rn Now,we are in place is new campus,Yuhua Campus scenery is very beautiful.Look,there is our campus Yuhua lake,another is a row of cherry trees.Since our campus is National University,all the buildings are national style.rn The campus is full of green,fresh air,beautiful environment,many students are like here,including me.This is our beautiful campus ,thank you for your coming.rn I hope we can become better friends and wish you good health ,happy every day.I was the Art Istitute of Visual Communication Design 3 class Ann.
你以前是那的学生？I am a student of the Art Istitute of Visual Communication Design class 3, Ann.
I'm from HongHe of Yunnan province.
是云南吧。
I like playing volleyball and play computer games.
后面也是喜欢吧，也要ing啊。I like playing volleyball and playing computer games.
we are in place is new campus
where we are in the place is new campus.
all the buildings are national style.
all the buildings are in the national style.
many students are like here,
神马。many students like here
I hope we can become better friends
比较什么==I hope we can become good friends
你以前是那的学生？I am a student of the Art Istitute of Visual Communication Design class 3, Ann.
I'm from HongHe of Yunnan province.
是云南吧。
I like playing volleyball and play computer games.
后面也是喜欢吧，也要ing啊。I like playing volleyball and playing computer games.
we are in place is new campus
where we are in the place is new campus.
all the buildings are national style.
all the buildings are in the national style.
many students are like here,
神马。many students like here
I hope we can become better friends
比较什么==I hope we can become good friends
Welcome to the Yannan University of Nationalities Yuhua Campus. I'm Ann, 19 years old, coming from HongHe city of Yunnan, i study in grade 3 of the Art institute of Visual Communication Design. I like playing volleyball and computer games. I am the branch secretary of our class.
We are now in the just place that is our new campus , It's beautiful. You can see the Yuhua lake there and a line of cherry trees. the new campus has been in the national style since our school was founded.
The campus is full of green, fresh air, many students are like here,including me. It is really a wonderful place.
Thanks for your time and I hope we can be good friends each other
Wish you have a good day
We are now in the just place that is our new campus , It's beautiful. You can see the Yuhua lake there and a line of cherry trees. the new campus has been in the national style since our school was founded.
The campus is full of green, fresh air, many students are like here,including me. It is really a wonderful place.
Thanks for your time and I hope we can be good friends each other
Wish you have a good day
麻烦给修改一下这篇英语作文，看看还能怎么改改，谢谢
Everyone has their own dream ,we are no exception ,for our dream and reality only a layer of the diaphragm that is society.rn Dream to achieve the premise is the first of this ideal can not be empty to meet the reality, only the right ideal to have the value of struggle. Second in the ideal after we have to struggle, only to continue to adhere to the ideals of the more further. In the university life we dream is beautiful, temporarily not social to sharpen us, but when we have entered the society many dreams may will because of various difficulties and burst, after all, a lot of time reality is cruel, it is not possible to everything is satisfactory. Therefore, only we are now learning to enrich themselves in order to achieve their dreams in the future to provide the basis for the future in society.rn Reality is real, every day feeling, is inspired by the foot of the road; the dream is the heart persistent goal, is suspended on the reality of the rainbow. Life is not a castle in the sky in the distance. As long as along the reality continues to struggle and constantly adjusts the dream of attitude, at the appropriate time. We will succeed.你这完全是中式英语，应该是翻译器翻译出来的，基本没有可改的价值，还不如把中文贴上给你直接翻译来的快。
In the university life we dream is beautiful, temporarily not social to sharpen us, but when we have entered the society many dreams may will because of various difficulties and burst, after all（原文应该是 ： 在大学里我们的理想是美丽的，暂时没有社会来修正我们。但是当我们走进社会 许多的梦想将因为各种问题而？）
In the university life we dream is beautiful, temporarily not social to sharpen us, but when we have entered the society many dreams may will because of various difficulties and burst, after all（原文应该是 ： 在大学里我们的理想是美丽的，暂时没有社会来修正我们。但是当我们走进社会 许多的梦想将因为各种问题而？）
放寒假的第二天，我和妈妈一起乘坐地铁来到长隆欢乐世界。正门那里有栩栩如生的老虎雕像，还有人穿着老虎衣服，样子很可爱、很友善的和游客拍照，我和妈妈迫不及待的拍了几张照片作为留念。
我和妈妈去玩十环过山车，十环过山车是一个刺激的游戏项目，它十环相连，360度转弯，头脚颠倒，速度也非常快。天生胆小的妈妈不敢玩这刺激的游戏项目，所以我自己去玩了两次十环过山车，我也玩过了：追风者、大力水手、龙卷风暴、激流勇进、海盗漂流、超级大摆锤、摩托过山车、垂直过山车······最刺激、最好玩就得是垂直过山车了，我满怀着激动无比又十分紧张的心情坐上了垂直过山车，"我们"系好安全带后，工作人员再认真仔细地检查好“我们”安全带有没有系紧后，才按了垂直过山车的游戏开关，刚开始垂直过山车慢慢地走动着，到爬上道轨时像蜗牛 一样慢，我的身体位置来过180度的转变，头仰望天空，我的心嘣嘣跳像一只迷路的小白兔一样乱撞，几秒钟时间很难熬，终于轨道垂直的顶峰，车子像火箭一样飞奔下来，风刮到面上觉得有点疼，眼前一片空白，大家都发出了救命的尖叫，真好玩呀！
我和妈妈一起来到了电影院，看4D电影<<冰河世纪3>>，看这电影我像来到远古的恐龙世纪一样，例如：恐龙打一个喷嚏，就有一些水喷到我们的脸上、恐龙用尾巴甩一甩，我们的椅子就顶一下，像恐龙的尾巴打到我们的腰一样，树叶被风刮起来，我们的脚也被树叶扫一下·····这电影真精彩。时间过得真快不知不觉已经晚上了，我们就依依不舍的离开游乐园回家了，不过今天玩得真高兴！
我和妈妈去玩十环过山车，十环过山车是一个刺激的游戏项目，它十环相连，360度转弯，头脚颠倒，速度也非常快。天生胆小的妈妈不敢玩这刺激的游戏项目，所以我自己去玩了两次十环过山车，我也玩过了：追风者、大力水手、龙卷风暴、激流勇进、海盗漂流、超级大摆锤、摩托过山车、垂直过山车······最刺激、最好玩就得是垂直过山车了，我满怀着激动无比又十分紧张的心情坐上了垂直过山车，"我们"系好安全带后，工作人员再认真仔细地检查好“我们”安全带有没有系紧后，才按了垂直过山车的游戏开关，刚开始垂直过山车慢慢地走动着，到爬上道轨时像蜗牛 一样慢，我的身体位置来过180度的转变，头仰望天空，我的心嘣嘣跳像一只迷路的小白兔一样乱撞，几秒钟时间很难熬，终于轨道垂直的顶峰，车子像火箭一样飞奔下来，风刮到面上觉得有点疼，眼前一片空白，大家都发出了救命的尖叫，真好玩呀！
我和妈妈一起来到了电影院，看4D电影<<冰河世纪3>>，看这电影我像来到远古的恐龙世纪一样，例如：恐龙打一个喷嚏，就有一些水喷到我们的脸上、恐龙用尾巴甩一甩，我们的椅子就顶一下，像恐龙的尾巴打到我们的腰一样，树叶被风刮起来，我们的脚也被树叶扫一下·····这电影真精彩。时间过得真快不知不觉已经晚上了，我们就依依不舍的离开游乐园回家了，不过今天玩得真高兴！
no改成not
请帮忙改一下我的英语作文的语法错误（改好追加40谢谢）！
At the beginning of the class, we promised to follow the rules of this class. Then we shake hands one by one. That means we need to do what we just promised and to trust others. I felt once I promised something, nothing would stop me to hold my promises.rnPeople always want to have faith in other people. This constructed the frame of the relationship between people. If one does not follow his promises, he would lose all the trusts that other people have gave to him. People become more and more suspected nowadays because there are so many lies and dishonest. Maybe only one person did not follow the rules, and he influenced small amount people stop trusting. They may think, I do not want to be fooled around again; I will do what he has done. There are only a few people who are moral enough can ignore other people’s actions. When most of the people do not follow the rules or stop trusting, this world will be messed up.rnWhat we had done in the class also like a “ceremony”. I promised to my teacher and my classmates. The promises and trusts are in this class. When a Christian gets baptized, when a Buddhist takes converts, they need to declare they will follow what those religions require them to do. Although priests and people can officially count they are in the religion, I think it does not matter whether there has been priest to be a witness during that. It is only a ceremony between the person and the god. When the person has promised he will follow the rules and trusted in the God, the God will also promise something to the person. Then there is a connection between the person and the god; it does not involve in other people.rnSome promises we need to say it out loud, and there are also some promises maybe just an eyes-contact or a body language. But it connects people, creatures or gods. Sometimes promises and trusts are unbreakable, but sometimes they are fragile. So people have the ceremonies and contracts to help us follow the rules and trust others.浏览挑了：
nothing would stop me to hold my promises.
改成 ...stop me(my) holding...
he would lose all the trusts that other people have gave to him
改成。。。have given to...
When most of the people do not follow the rules or stop trusting，
or改成and..
this world will be messed up。
this改成the.
it does not involve in other people.
does not involve改成 ...isn't involved...
nothing would stop me to hold my promises.
改成 ...stop me(my) holding...
he would lose all the trusts that other people have gave to him
改成。。。have given to...
When most of the people do not follow the rules or stop trusting，
or改成and..
this world will be messed up。
this改成the.
it does not involve in other people.
does not involve改成 ...isn't involved...
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